Here is my site -

[oneeyebrow]

I think it needs more work but hey best to get started right?

http://www.fatsaway.com/

[BradleyD.Haslam]

So, this is your very first site, right?

EXCELLENT JOB!!!

Right off the bat,
your paying attention to the message.
SO many have to re-evaluate that later.
Your starting out perfectly!

* Good white space.
* Message focused to the readers want instead of thier need,
or worse... your offer or it's features.
* Opt-in box with a freebie, and in the visual center.

Good job!!
I expect to hear a success story someday soon!

[BradleyD.Haslam]

btw...

The first improvement I would do?

Think content. Simple content.

Create pages for each of the "products" on the right.
(remove the word "product", use something like "resources" )
Talk about them, and why you would recommend them.
Scatter links to the product in your writing
instead of using a link at the bottom.
And use the anchor text link like you did on the front page.

Start there, and focus on a "site" now instead of just a page.
And a header graphic?
People say good AND bad about them.
It's an element that has to be tested.
But I would 'personally' use one on this site.
And test without it later on.
I wouldn't start without one.

Cheers!
Brad.

[markov]

The site loads "that The page cannot be displayed" message.

[oneeyebrow]

BradleyD.Haslam thank you for your advice

Ill get to it

markov site should be loading ok